After raiders attack, refugees from many villages learn to survive and unite to face their attackers.
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Friday, October 10, 2008
Join forces to fight the raiders
After raiders attack, refugees from many villages learn to survive and unite to face their attackers.
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this one needs more info u cant understand it but i think that it could b good!
ReplyDeletethis needs more stuff jeez its kinda boring with just the notes
ReplyDeletedudewho every did this i like it a lot. It is my faveorite so far i think i miht vote for you.
ReplyDeletei don't like how everyone dies. you might want to discribe things a little better...
ReplyDeletedudewho every did this i like it a lot. It is my faveorite so far i think i miht vote for you.
ReplyDeleteI think anonymous#2 is right and it needs more details
ReplyDeleteI think anonymous#2 is right and it needs more details
ReplyDeleteIT does need a little more info.But this is like a survival story with a big battle at the end to finish it.I really like it so I give it my vote.
ReplyDeleteI think this could turn into a good story if you added more detail. Also, I thought that it took place in the woods not the desert.
ReplyDeleteGROSS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! What is with the cannibalism?????????? I understand people getting really hungry, but please, CANNIBALISM??????????????????!!!!!!!!
ReplyDeletePlease change this story, PLEASE!!!!!!! Then maybe it will be a little bit ok.
I think that the way you presented the story was unclear.
ReplyDeleteI wasn't sure if it ended or not.
This does need more stuff and what do they est in the dessert? Have any of you guys seen pictures? It's a sandy, empty wilderness not a tropical beach!
ReplyDeleteI really like this story even though I am in the groop that wrote it.
ReplyDeleteI have to give this my vote. It has potential and a popular outline, and is vague enough for everyone to twist it to their will and liking. I VOTE FOR THIS. (In case I have a change of heart, be aware on other links if my vote is changed. My vote.
ReplyDeletekool story but ummmm i think that it maybe needs to be a little more spacific in a way, WHY r there notes?????
ReplyDeleteThere is NO CANNIBALISM! It's a dessert animal that eats the dead bodies. But it is pretty boring.
ReplyDeletecool (my vote)
ReplyDeleteI like this story!
ReplyDeleteI think that this story needs some more details and it is very violent.
ReplyDeleteThis is a good list of events, I can follow it very easily, but who are the characters that are fighting this battle? This is a very action-packed story. I like it.
ReplyDeleteerm...needs more work..and details!!! could be FABOO if you worked on it
ReplyDelete!!!!!!!!!
i dont understand what is going on at all but... some ideas caught my eye good potential
ReplyDeletehummmdidlyummmm.....no.
ReplyDeleteit needs mor details. i couldnt understand ur outline....a bit messy too.. srry <:(